December 25, 2010

Saturday Centus - 12/25/10 - Nothing Gruesome or Gory Today

Time again for Saturday Centus, hosted by the ever-clever Jenny Matlock. The task? Incorporate her prompt (appearing in bold, below) in a story of no more than 100 words. Keep it PG-rated, there are kids in the room.

Professional Courtesy?

His temp job ended yesterday.

The white-bearded fat man rolled through the church doors. He grabbed his mop and began cleaning the narthex floor. It had snowed for days; parishioners tracked in white traces of road salt on their boots.


As he worked, his thoughts returned to Sara. She was only six-years old, but her sad smile hinted at a lifetime's worth of hardship.


She had asked if he could bring her mother a warm coat. She wanted nothing for herself.


He entered the chapel and knelt by the altar. Head bowed, he asked God for assistance.


Even mall Santas can't fulfill all Christmas wishes themselves.


20 comments:

  1. Aww I'm tearing up! I hope Sara's mom gets a coat!Excellent!~Ames

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  2. Fab...so true...really loved this one...

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  3. How lovely - really liked this one!

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  4. This is so touching and so in keeping of the spirit of Christmas. Thanks.

    Namaste.........cj

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  5. So sweet! A wonderful take on the prompt.

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  6. Brought tears to my eyes, just lovely.

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  7. Aww, what a touching story! Great job!

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  8. This is very sweet and sad. It's an important reminder that life is so hard for so many.
    xoRobyn

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  9. I loved this. So touching and heart breaking. Good centus.

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  10. Very nice and with wonderful economy of words...Peace and blessings

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  11. so sad ... and touching ... really well done

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  12. Wonderful story, June! I only wish I'd read it on Christmas Day so I could have shared it with the family.

    Happy New Year.

    =)

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  13. What a tender and sweet story to start the New Year with.

    This made me cry.

    Really, really excellent.

    Getting to read your writing was really one of my blessings for 2010. Your style is one of my favorites.

    Sending you warm wishes for a 2011 filled with discoveries, adventures and small joys to warm your heart.

    Thank you!

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  14. Wonderfully done ... and what a gift to your reader's with "sensitve" stomachs. HAHA!

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